I'm revising Freak Show. I may have lost a little bit of my mind. Enjoy.
Why do we need the word "amongst"? Did "'among" spend a semester abroad and come back with a fake accent or something? (aka, "I got 6 words into my manuscript before getting really angry at my choice of words")
"...a scandalous font." How can a font be scandalous? Did it have an affair with Comic Sans?
Stop. Using. The. Word. Jagged. (apparently I used it 10 times in 83k words)
Fun new game: does this planet really have multiple suns or is that a typo?
None of this is a lie; she's just telling the truth from a different time. And pretending to be a robot.
Space Negan needs a spinoff. He interests me. (I call him Space Negan because he seems like he would carry a baseball bat wrapped in barbed wire. And I can't remember his real name)
Why couldn't I have based the story on "We Built this City"? Then I could have named a ship Knee-deep in the Hoopla. (For maximum benefit, read this note in the voice of a child having a temper tantrum. My other story is more whimsical than this one and I just I couldn't take the seriousness for one more minute)
Obviously the problem occurs because it's hard to sing perfectly while simultaneously being a robot on a different planet.
I've just come to the realization that my book is just The Breakfast Club but in space and with grown-ups and slightly more high-stakes laser battles.
If my novel was Breaking Cat News, Pneuman would be Puck.
I know the Mr. Mister song isn't really saying "carry a laser down the road that I must travel," but if it was it would be an awesome theme song for this book. I mean, no one actually carries the lasers and there are no roads but still. I probably use the word "laser" more often than I use "jagged."